Talk:Episode 295 (Balloon Adventure)/@comment-29692075-20161014023123

OK, I don't like critiquing stories but, here goes: The story was overall ok. Grammar needs work, and I would like to see a completed version of it.

The pros:


 * has alot of potential.


 * from a technical point of view, good work.

The cons:


 * name looks too similar to a story that copied an existing story of mine.


 * the grammar needs work. You did a good job for the most part, but watch the grammar next time.

TurboPups32 (talk) 02:31, October 14, 2016 (UTC)